Reflecting on progress

Looking back at my first blog post, I think that I’ve been making progress when it comes to being able to write and come with ideas to whichever topic I am given. Some aspects of the class that I’ve found the most helpful is peer review, and the recently assigned blogs. I think the blogs are very helpful due to the fact that before each essay, we are assigned to write some ideas in our blogs to help us later on write the essay. Something that I would like to change in the class is for example to be given some directions on the best way to organize our essays. And also to be able to write sometimes less than three pages for some essays. For the reason that sometimes there is not that much to write about on some topics, and I tend to repeat the same info over and over again in order to be able to finish the three pages. Like I said peer review has helped me improve in my writing process. As well as the teacher’s advice on including lots of details of the topic of each essay, in order to give the reader a better understanding of what is being talked about. My writing has changed since the semester started, because I know that giving better details and more organized info makes a better essay. I haven’t had trouble understanding the assignments, and I’m looking forward to go through the rest of the semester.

Rhetorical situations of both essays

   The purpose of the ad analysis is to be able to analyze an ad, and describe how it tries to appeal to its audience or what message it tries to send. The audience at who this essay is directed is those who want to learn the aspects of an ad.  The purpose of my literacy narrative essay is to explain the way an important event in your life has impacted your thoughts about writing. The audience of this essay would be people interested in reading about this topic. The tone for both essay would be informative and/or a serious tone. The genre would as well be informative for both.  The way, in which the rhetorical situations could affect the choices I make when writing another paper is that, I could be able to know the difference between telling a story and analyzing something.

Advertisement Analysis

Purpose: The action/advertisement is named "None of us would like to end up like this.. neither would other-than-human animals". And it consisted of four large foam plates, containing four naked activists inside, covered in plastic and with a human meat sticker on them. And the whole idea of this was to imitate the meat trays found in supermarkets. Their objective was to tell people to give the idea of becoming a vegeterian, a second thought, before saying no. As well as to make them think about how wrong is the fact that millions of animals are killed each year for food.  And to show that like any other than human animals, we are also animals, and we neither would like to end up like that.

Audience: The adverstisement is mostly aimed at those that consume lots of meat, to the general public, as well as to every other person that is not aware of the fact. It tries to put the idea in peoples minds about that like any animal, we as well wouln't like to end up like that.

Genre: This ad takes the idea of convinsing and persuading, people to contribute to the fight against animal cruelty and killings, to another level. By them getting naked and wrapping themselves in plastic on top of a foam plate, they try to tell people they are being serious about this situation.

Tone: The nudity, akward, surprising, weird way they tried to deliver this message creates a serious tone. And shows how serious they are, that they decided to make this action.

Revisions

 My final draft doesn’t look that different from my rough draft, changes were made, but not to the point that it makes it look very different than how it was. I did fix some fragments, grammar, and run-on sentences, but not enough to be able to spot any major differences. After revising my essay I did identify some errors, which I tend to make very often when writing essays. Some of them are that I tend to repeat myself a lot, and also I made the mistake of making my sentences too long.

 While I read my paper it did sort of help because, it helped me spot some errors along the way. But after all peer review did also help me make revisions and noticed some errors that I wouldn’t have noticed. After all, peer review helped a lot, because they helped me better my essay and I was able to hear someone else’s opinion about it, before turning it in. Some weak aspects of my paper were mistakes like run-on sentences, as well as some grammar mistakes. Some good aspects of my paper were that I was able to catch reader’s attention, and was able to not to fall off topic and end my essay with a sort of good conclusion.