Common Errors assign.#11

  Looking back at several errors I tend to make when writing an essay, the most common one is repeating same stuff over and over again. And I’ve noticed that not only me but as well as several of my classmates have had this problem. As a solution whenever I write an essay I try to only repeat facts when necessary, and try to write something else when the lack of info is the cause of this problem. I’ve also noticed that I tend to write the word “Also” and several teachers have written back comments on several papers pointing out that problem. I guess a way to fix that would be to try to use other kinds of transitional words other than “also”.

   
   Another error would be that I sometimes happen to write several run on sentences in my writing, I guess should practice several remedies like using semicolons and coordinating conjunctions. Sometime I also tend to go off topic when writing my essays, stuff that is somehow related to the topic but at the end it causes a lot of confusion throughout the essay.

Peer review assignment #10

Peer review in my opinion has been effective so far. First of all everybody has different opinions and thought’s. Because of this reason peer review is effective, because your peer might have different ways to better your essay. Some of my strengths and weaknesses as a peer reviewer is that I am able to identify errors easily and I am able to give good feedback understandable enough for my peer to understand and improve his/her essay. I think doing peer review with smaller groups is more helpful and effective, because of less distractions and more able to focus on only one peer. 

My thoughts about college

   College so far has been a great experience. All of the classes I’ve taken so far, I think have been very helpful. I’ve learned a lot and I can see how these classes may be of great help in the future. I have not yet decided what I would like to major in, but I am a bit interested in justice studies. Some of the classes I’ve taken could be very helpful no matter what I decide to major in or be. Like for example my past and recent writing classes. The two writing classes have been very helpful, and I have learned a lot and so far I think my writing has improved. Being able to write good essays, and having good writing skills could be of great help in the future.

     What I’ve enjoyed the most in college is the really simple schedule, and the reasonable time for each class. But what I have enjoyed the least would be the really complex and long assignments from several classes. High school years where some of the best years of my life, but I do have to admit that I do enjoy the independence in college.

Argument summary

Well although I didn’t understand the article that well, I will have to say that the article “Don’t Presume to Know a Pig’s Mind” was the one more interesting. The article is basically about the author trying to analyze an ad. An ad used by the chipotle Mexican grill, the author goes in depth about what he thinks the ad is trying to say. He talks about how wrong is the fact that in the ad pigs are put in into large crowded buildings, and pumped with antibiotics. The author talks about how badly these pigs are treated and how this ad creates an effect on American farmers. He talks about how the farmers should abandon their methods of production like using genetically altered seeds, and using crates which hurts animals that later we are expected to consume.

 I chose to write about this particular article, because the other ones where really difficult to determine what their purpose was. I guess I found this article interesting because it tries to analyze an ad, and show his thoughts about it.