Peer review assignment #10

Peer review in my opinion has been effective so far. First of all everybody has different opinions and thought’s. Because of this reason peer review is effective, because your peer might have different ways to better your essay. Some of my strengths and weaknesses as a peer reviewer is that I am able to identify errors easily and I am able to give good feedback understandable enough for my peer to understand and improve his/her essay. I think doing peer review with smaller groups is more helpful and effective, because of less distractions and more able to focus on only one peer. 

My thoughts about college

   College so far has been a great experience. All of the classes I’ve taken so far, I think have been very helpful. I’ve learned a lot and I can see how these classes may be of great help in the future. I have not yet decided what I would like to major in, but I am a bit interested in justice studies. Some of the classes I’ve taken could be very helpful no matter what I decide to major in or be. Like for example my past and recent writing classes. The two writing classes have been very helpful, and I have learned a lot and so far I think my writing has improved. Being able to write good essays, and having good writing skills could be of great help in the future.

     What I’ve enjoyed the most in college is the really simple schedule, and the reasonable time for each class. But what I have enjoyed the least would be the really complex and long assignments from several classes. High school years where some of the best years of my life, but I do have to admit that I do enjoy the independence in college.

Argument summary

Well although I didn’t understand the article that well, I will have to say that the article “Don’t Presume to Know a Pig’s Mind” was the one more interesting. The article is basically about the author trying to analyze an ad. An ad used by the chipotle Mexican grill, the author goes in depth about what he thinks the ad is trying to say. He talks about how wrong is the fact that in the ad pigs are put in into large crowded buildings, and pumped with antibiotics. The author talks about how badly these pigs are treated and how this ad creates an effect on American farmers. He talks about how the farmers should abandon their methods of production like using genetically altered seeds, and using crates which hurts animals that later we are expected to consume.

 I chose to write about this particular article, because the other ones where really difficult to determine what their purpose was. I guess I found this article interesting because it tries to analyze an ad, and show his thoughts about it.

Reflecting on progress

Looking back at my first blog post, I think that I’ve been making progress when it comes to being able to write and come with ideas to whichever topic I am given. Some aspects of the class that I’ve found the most helpful is peer review, and the recently assigned blogs. I think the blogs are very helpful due to the fact that before each essay, we are assigned to write some ideas in our blogs to help us later on write the essay. Something that I would like to change in the class is for example to be given some directions on the best way to organize our essays. And also to be able to write sometimes less than three pages for some essays. For the reason that sometimes there is not that much to write about on some topics, and I tend to repeat the same info over and over again in order to be able to finish the three pages. Like I said peer review has helped me improve in my writing process. As well as the teacher’s advice on including lots of details of the topic of each essay, in order to give the reader a better understanding of what is being talked about. My writing has changed since the semester started, because I know that giving better details and more organized info makes a better essay. I haven’t had trouble understanding the assignments, and I’m looking forward to go through the rest of the semester.

Rhetorical situations of both essays

   The purpose of the ad analysis is to be able to analyze an ad, and describe how it tries to appeal to its audience or what message it tries to send. The audience at who this essay is directed is those who want to learn the aspects of an ad.  The purpose of my literacy narrative essay is to explain the way an important event in your life has impacted your thoughts about writing. The audience of this essay would be people interested in reading about this topic. The tone for both essay would be informative and/or a serious tone. The genre would as well be informative for both.  The way, in which the rhetorical situations could affect the choices I make when writing another paper is that, I could be able to know the difference between telling a story and analyzing something.

Advertisement Analysis

Purpose: The action/advertisement is named "None of us would like to end up like this.. neither would other-than-human animals". And it consisted of four large foam plates, containing four naked activists inside, covered in plastic and with a human meat sticker on them. And the whole idea of this was to imitate the meat trays found in supermarkets. Their objective was to tell people to give the idea of becoming a vegeterian, a second thought, before saying no. As well as to make them think about how wrong is the fact that millions of animals are killed each year for food.  And to show that like any other than human animals, we are also animals, and we neither would like to end up like that.

Audience: The adverstisement is mostly aimed at those that consume lots of meat, to the general public, as well as to every other person that is not aware of the fact. It tries to put the idea in peoples minds about that like any animal, we as well wouln't like to end up like that.

Genre: This ad takes the idea of convinsing and persuading, people to contribute to the fight against animal cruelty and killings, to another level. By them getting naked and wrapping themselves in plastic on top of a foam plate, they try to tell people they are being serious about this situation.

Tone: The nudity, akward, surprising, weird way they tried to deliver this message creates a serious tone. And shows how serious they are, that they decided to make this action.

Revisions

 My final draft doesn’t look that different from my rough draft, changes were made, but not to the point that it makes it look very different than how it was. I did fix some fragments, grammar, and run-on sentences, but not enough to be able to spot any major differences. After revising my essay I did identify some errors, which I tend to make very often when writing essays. Some of them are that I tend to repeat myself a lot, and also I made the mistake of making my sentences too long.

 While I read my paper it did sort of help because, it helped me spot some errors along the way. But after all peer review did also help me make revisions and noticed some errors that I wouldn’t have noticed. After all, peer review helped a lot, because they helped me better my essay and I was able to hear someone else’s opinion about it, before turning it in. Some weak aspects of my paper were mistakes like run-on sentences, as well as some grammar mistakes. Some good aspects of my paper were that I was able to catch reader’s attention, and was able to not to fall off topic and end my essay with a sort of good conclusion.